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Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

Sorry, Mercer, I've been so busy I've really just been in and out for the most part. As soon as I get some time to I will add in some ideas.
 
Unfortunately I'm also pretty busy these days. Doesn't help, does it? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/modding.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":modding" border="0" alt="modding.gif" />
 
It is frustrating. I've been driving all day since 6 a.m. and am pretty much a zombie right now so I can't add anything tonight. But we will get the script going again. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
That last scene we have, I think it is very important in that its a turning point for Jack. He is now letting go (whether he knows it or not he soon will) of the life he knew and is starting to embrace the notion of a life as a pirate. He feels deep empathy for the pirates in the water and disdain for Mercer.
I like the sun setting as the final image for this scene but I think Jack's face should also be in there, maybe with the sun setting behind him and a pained look on his face because the life he knew is now over.
 
Interesting thought there. This could play right into another thought I had. At the end of the film, the burning of the Wench happens at night (gives us a nice contrast of the flames against the black sky). Then Jack makes the deal with Davy and the final battle happens early in the day so that Jack can escape into the rising sun. His transformation to become a pirate begins with the setting sun in the scene you describe and ends as he sails into the rising sun here.
 
I like it. Sort of the curtain coming down in the scene I described and the curtain lifting up again with your scene. A butterfly emerging from the cocoon. I like the imagery to your scene, Pieter and Jack sailing off into the rising sun. That is very powerful. And I do think that movies are really moved along by that type of imagery, it punctuates the moment. I can picture both of those scenes in my mind. What does everyone else think?
 
Epic, mate! I like that idea. I intended that scene to just show Jack how evil the EITC actually is and how he might be forced to do things bad to these people he is starting to admire. Jack is now contemplating more than ever the notion of becoming a pirate. He wants to be free and sail the seas free of deadlines and charters.

Yes, that scene would have powerful imagery. Academy Award winning i am thinking... <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="icon_wink.gif" /> Oh, and at the end when he sails into a rising sun we need to have his dramatic theme playing loudly and then it cuts to the credit song. I can picture that right now.
 
Ahoy m8's!

Been reading but didn't had time to write.
Now I'm free as a bird.

I was just reading the script all over again.
I love it!
That dinner speach Jack gave was so funny.
And Nathaniel and Jack coversation.... very good.

So which scene is next? After the shooting of pirates in the water?
 
Well, we would have them continue on the mission, but now we have filled it in a lot more in regards to Jack entertaining some serious reservations about his chosen vocation and this will fit in nicely with the actions he takes once they reach their destination. Do we have another scene between Edwards and Jack?
 
I think it's best to go ahead with the "land ho" scene and then the part in Africa. It might be a good idea to get a quick version of the whole script done. Then we always improve it later, but at least we'd know where the story goes. Right now we have a general idea of where the story goes, but not a specific idea. Once we have the specifics done, we can then work towards that much better. I hope. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_confused.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="icon_confused.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=245842:date=Mar 17 2008, 05:04 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Mar 17 2008, 05:04 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=245842"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I think it's best to go ahead with the "land ho" scene and then the part in Africa. It might be a good idea to get a quick version of the whole script done. Then we always improve it later, but at least we'd know where the story goes. Right now we have a general idea of where the story goes, but not a specific idea. Once we have the specifics done, we can then work towards that much better. I hope. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_confused.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="icon_confused.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->


I think you are right.
So how should the ''Land Ho!'' scene look like?
I guess not like that version we had.
I had some ideas in my head but...darn...can't think of any now.
 
I liked that version we had though. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />
Oh well; I suppose we might better handle it differently. I recall our version didn't entirely make sense in the story. But it did have some nice elements that perhaps we could salvage. And how about that "Mercer are we there yet?" montage? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/24.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":rofl" border="0" alt="24.gif" />
 
You mean:

<!--quoteo--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE </div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->INT. WICKED WENCH, JACKS OFFICE - DAY

Jack is staniding in his office and looking throughout the windows.
Footsteps are heard. Jack turns his head slightly towards doors.
Mercer opens the door and enters.
Jack turns towards doors.


MERCER
(angry)
Mr. Sparrow... Are we running late? Again ?!



JACK
...Of course not. CAPTAIN Jack Sparrow is never late.



MERCER
Oh really? We should have seen land two days ago!
(pointing at him)



JACK
How did you figure that? Navigation is not an exact science. There's plenty of variables that can delay one. Wind, current, weather conditions, absence of rum.



MERCER
You better do something about that or... (grabs his pistol)



JACK
Sure. I'll summon some land for you straight away. Who do you think I am? Poseidon?



SAILOR
(Heard form the deck)
Land ho!!!



Jack smiles at Mercer.



EXT. WICKED WENCH, MAIN DECK

Jack and Mercer walking out of Jack's office.
We see some sailors passing by them as they
walk towards Edwards who is looking through the spyglass.
Jack grabs his own spyglass and looks.



JACK
(to Mercer)
There's your land.



Mercer grumbles. Clearly he is disappointed.



JACK
Set a course along the shore, if you please, Mr Edwards.



EDWARDS
Aye aye, captain!



Jack walks into his cabin and returns on deck with some charts. He starts observing the coastline and comparing it with the charts.



JACK
Very impressive, Mr. Edwards. Right where we should be.
(to the sailors)
Prepare the boats for landing!<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
 
<a href="http://forum.piratesahoy.net//index.php?s=&showtopic=10925&view=findpost&p=224294" target="_blank">Here's</a> the original Land Ho scene. Be sure to re-read the following posts as well, because there's some additional thoughts on possible changes to that scene. I especially like Morgan's suggestion:<!--quoteo(post=224376:date=Dec 4 2007, 10:32 PM:name=Morgan Terror)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Morgan Terror @ Dec 4 2007, 10:32 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=224376"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Mercer: We should have seen land two days ago!
Jack: How did you figure that? Navigation is not an exact science. There's plenty of variables that can delay one. Wind, current, weather conditions, absence of rum.
Mercer: You better do something about that.
Jack: <b>right, i'll get the rum.</b><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
And then with Old Salt's addition:<!--quoteo(post=224419:date=Dec 5 2007, 05:56 AM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Old Salt @ Dec 5 2007, 05:56 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=224419"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->MERCER
(draws his pistol)
Mr. Sparrow, would you like to be shot?

JACK
(smiles weakly)
I'd rather get the rum.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Can we really afford to NOT use that? It's friggin' brilliant! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/24.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":rofl" border="0" alt="24.gif" />

As for the "are we there yet" montage, my idea was that Mercer keeps asking Jack where they are each day. When can put that into a montage, which would enable us to condense the passing of time. Also it could be made to be really quite funny. The montage then ends with the Land Ho scene. Perhaps Mercer loses his patience because he believe Jack is delaying on purpose, which could then lead into above scene, which would then result into:<!--quoteo(post=224419:date=Dec 5 2007, 05:56 AM:name=Old Salt)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Old Salt @ Dec 5 2007, 05:56 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=224419"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->A tension filled moment passes, Mercer cocks his gun.

JACK
(holds a finger up)
Right. I'll get some land for you straight away.

SAILOR
(Heard form the deck)
Land ho!!!

JACK
(to Mercer)
There's your land.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->I imagine Jack making a gesture by pointing both his hands, palms towards each other, towards the land with that last sentence. I can really picture Jack doing that. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />
 
Yap... thats the one.
I like that one.

Although its kinnda...''strange'' that Land Ho! is heard right when Mercer is in his office complaining.
 
NOW I remember what was wrong with the "Land Ho" scene. It makes no sense to have a "Land Ho" scene, because the route from England to Ivory Coast is parallel to land, of course. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/mybad.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":facepalm" border="0" alt="mybad.gif" />
Which means that having a "land ho" scene makes no sense, because they'd be in sight of land virtually all the time. Perhaps something simple as "Destination Ho" might work, though that does sound pretty stupid.

Another thought I suddenly had, which is perhaps more piratey, is that their destination is marked with a strangely shaped rock on the shore with a nicely piratey name. "Skull Rock" or something like that, though this is fairly generic and it would be fun if we could use something better here. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="wink.gif" />

With Edwards being in charge of navigation, he could tell Jack (Mercer doesn't know) that they would reach their destination at "10 past noon" the following day or something like that and Mercer butts into Jack's office to ask if they're there yet at 12 'o clock. Then at precisely 12:10 a sailor comes into the cabin saying that they have Skull Rock in sight. That'd also allow Jack to compliment on his impeccable timing.

Just a bunch of random thoughts. Needs to be finetuned. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/user_comment.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":wp" border="0" alt="user_comment.gif" />
 
We do not have the scene on the land written yet. Right?
Ill try to think up with something the next couple of days.


Lets get the show back on the road!
 
Even moreso, perhaps Edwards told Jack that they would sight Skull Rock at 12:10, but didn't tell Mercer. So Jack told Mercer to come to his cabin at 12:00 and Mercer starts complaining for ten minutes, enabeling Jack to impress Mercer with being apparently able to predict when they sight their destination. Of course this had best be implied, rather than shown. But it does sound like something Jack might do; after all, he IS pretty cunning and definitly not stupid. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />
 
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