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Pirates of the Caribbean: Community Prequel Script

<!--quoteo(post=272496:date=Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272496"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->That was indeed what I was referring to, Old Salt. Our friends arrive at the village and have a talk. Mercer stays there to set up a "trade". In reality Mercer tries to convince the villagers to help them in an attack of the nearby French town. Jack doesn't know this, but Edwards does. Jack and Edwards sail into the French town (they can safely enter, because Jack has been doing some off-the-chart trade there*) and Edwards tells Jack of the real plan. Then there's an attack on the French town and after the attack, the EITC marines capture the villagers. Edwards then knows that he was never given the whole truth either.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Couple of things. We know that Jack is the only one who knows where the location of this village is, and knows where "turtle rock" is, that marks from the shore the location of the village. Now, since we want the villagers to participate in the attack on the French port, then the village cannot be to far away from the port and Beckett must know this fact. Now, he could just send Edwards and Mercer there, but they would waste time fumbling around trying to find the village and Beckett doesn't want time wasted in this manner. So he needs Jack, but he needs also needs to give him a good enough reason so Jack will lead Mercer to the village. We are going to say that that reason is so Mercer can set up a "trade?"
I know I keep coming back to this but I think we have to come up with something that the audience and "Jack" will buy. Something that would make him betray the location of a people that he may or may not be doing some "of the chart" trading with as well. We may have to be more specific.
BTW, Pieter, I like that "off the chart trading" angle for Jack as a way that he can get the ship into the French port's harbor for the attack without being molested. We have to make sure that that is said at some point in the script, maybe when Beckett is talking to Jack in the beginning, he can make some sort of sly reference to Jack's... ahem.... trading with the port.

<!--quoteo(post=272496:date=Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272496"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I think the soldiers can just be part on the contigent that sets out towards the village. Otherwise we couldn't have Mercer's "I was just protecting our rear" joke. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/24.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":rofl" border="0" alt="24.gif" />
Also if we go by my suggestion above, we don't need dozens of EITC marines to go to the village anyway.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Right, I agree that this scenario is more plausible, but I would still like to get that part about the little girl holding the flower out to Mercer after the attack and Mercer just walking by her and the flower falling to the dirt and the scene closing with the flower being trampled by the marines. That would be powerful. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" /> I'm sure we could work this in.

<!--quoteo(post=272496:date=Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272496"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->The EITC doesn't need the villagers, but they claim they do. The first reason is because the villagers actually don't like the French town, so doing this would likely get the trust of the villagers. So basically it's an excuse for coming there. Secondly, it's much easier to capture Tia when half the other villagers died in the attack. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/whippa.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":whipa" border="0" alt="whippa.gif" />
Also, like Old Salt says, this would also give the French captain a reason to enter the story and not have it be just a random encounter.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Agreed. It is a way to get most of the men away from the village and of course its better for the French pirate to have a purpose here for entering the story instead of it just being random.

<!--quoteo(post=272496:date=Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272496"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->As for the GW moment, I think Jack should <i>succeed</i> on that one. And then mess up with the map thing. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/razz.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":razz" border="0" alt="razz.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Right, I guess no bumble for Jack getting out of the boat but he does screw up the map moment.

<!--quoteo(post=272496:date=Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 9 2008, 02:04 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272496"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->As Old Salt says, Mercer should join on the trip to make sure it goes right. Jack should be on the trip, because he can safely go into the French port so that the port can be attached from sea and land at the same time. Also Beckett wants to take the opportunity of this endeavour to get rid of Jack. Edwards should be on the trip because he's a competent officer who can take over from Jack when necessary. Mercer cannot do that.

However, Beckett tells Jack that they just want to establish a trade and during the voyage Jack gets more and more suspicious because of Mercer's and Edwards' presence and the EITC soldiers. Beckett tells Edwards that the voyage is intended to take command of the French port. The REAL reason is to capture Tia.

Makes sense? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/unsure.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":?" border="0" alt="unsure.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
It makes sense. Like I said earlier, its a more plausible explanation then just having the marines march to the village and take it over. If we can just come up with a more concrete reason that Beckett gives Jack for finding the village and also include that flower scene I think we could then start writing up that scene.
 
Perhaps Beckett DOES know the location of the village and Jack DOESN'T. There's no real need for Jack to show them where the village is, because we now have a different reason for Jack being on the journey. Of course Beckett just makes it appear like a simple setting up of a trade and at the beginning of the film, Jack is pretty gullible. However, he becomes more suspicious and witty as the events play on.

So at the beginning he DOES buy what Beckett says. However, after the visit to the village, Edwards tells Jack the "real" purpose of the voyage, which is to take the French port. However, then the EITC soldiers capture the villagers as well, so Beckett never gave the whole truth to neither Jack or Edwards. Perhaps he never even gave the whole truth to Mercer, saying only that he wanted to have those villagers captured. So basically nobody except Beckett knows that the whole thing is about Tia.

Of course once Jack finds out he's been double-crossed, he becomes much more suspicious, making his turn to piracy a lot more likely. He is beginning to understand that Beckett wants to get rid of him and that the only way for him to survive is to turn pirate. His happy days of doing both official and off-the-chart trades are over.

After the double-crossing, Jack knows he must become as clever and scheming as Beckett if he ever wants to take his revenge. So that's when he gets the idea of setting up the war between the EITC and the VOC, which will become a major setback for Beckett and will be the mark Jack left on Beckett. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/whippa.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":whipa" border="0" alt="whippa.gif" />

We should be able to work in the flower moment somewhere. It <i>is</i> a good idea. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=272567:date=Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272567"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Perhaps Beckett DOES know the location of the village and Jack DOESN'T. There's no real need for Jack to show them where the village is, because we now have a different reason for Jack being on the journey. Of course Beckett just makes it appear like a simple setting up of a trade and at the beginning of the film, Jack is pretty gullible. However, he becomes more suspicious and witty as the events play on.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Interesting. If Beckett did know the location, he could tell Mercer this in the beginning and make the audience suspicious early on. I think it would work better though if Beckett wasn't sure, only that he heard rumor of a "turtle rock" marking the location of the village. Say, due north of that point or something. Of course, Beckett wants Tia and also to be rid of Jack and he figures he can accomplish all of this.
Maybe we can use the "Jack is very gullible" tack and allude to this early on, with Jack making some sort of simple statement to someone that Beckett is a fool whom he can easily take advantage of. It wouldn't be a stretch for Jack to be thinking this way due to the fact that he frequently conducts other business with Beckett's ship and gets away with it, or so he thinks. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" /> And if that be the case then he would be susceptible to the idea of Beckett just wanting to trade with the village in good faith. However, though, as you said, he gradually grows more suspicious due to things he hears and observes on the voyage and begins to realize that Beckett is pretty smart and is using him. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/dunno.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":shrug" border="0" alt="dunno.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=272567:date=Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272567"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->So at the beginning he DOES buy what Beckett says. However, after the visit to the village, Edwards tells Jack the "real" purpose of the voyage, which is to take the French port. However, then the EITC soldiers capture the villagers as well, so Beckett never gave the whole truth to neither Jack or Edwards. Perhaps he never even gave the whole truth to Mercer, saying only that he wanted to have those villagers captured. So basically nobody except Beckett knows that the whole thing is about Tia.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
I like that. Kind of like the opening robbery scene of "The Dark Knight", where everyone was given just a bit of information. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/laugh.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="xD:" border="0" alt="laugh.gif" /> Although, this time, Beckett is keeping everyone, even Mercer, guessing. This can explain Mercer's increasing irritability on the voyage because he thinks he hasn't been told everything also. We can come up with some interesting dialogue between Edwards, Jack and Mercer as they are trying to feel each other out.
Maybe set up a confrontation later between the three when Jack (before he takes the ship) says that Beckett really wants Tia.

<!--quoteo(post=272567:date=Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272567"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Of course once Jack finds out he's been double-crossed, he becomes much more suspicious, making his turn to piracy a lot more likely. He is beginning to understand that Beckett wants to get rid of him and that the only way for him to survive is to turn pirate. His happy days of doing both official and off-the-chart trades are over.

After the double-crossing, Jack knows he must become as clever and scheming as Beckett if he ever wants to take his revenge. So that's when he gets the idea of setting up the war between the EITC and the VOC, which will become a major setback for Beckett and will be the mark Jack left on Beckett.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Jack's rather naive view of the world and those around him take a beating during this particular voyage and propel him toward the man and pirate he will turn out to be. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/pirate3.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":p2" border="0" alt="pirate3.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=272567:date=Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 10 2008, 07:48 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272567"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->We should be able to work in the flower moment somewhere. It <i>is</i> a good idea. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Most definitely. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
Everyone, I have some news here. Disney has put 2011 as the tenative date of the Pirates 4 release, so, they might already be in the planning stages. What is your opinion on this? I really hope we can get this in, and they take it seriously. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":)" border="0" alt="smile.gif" /> Here is a quote from a magazine article concerning it:

<i>
"The script for the fourth Pirates movie is being worked on and all the finances are in place, but it was decided Bloom's character and a number of minor roles were not necessary to ensure it would be yet another box office smash for Disney," the report claimed.</i>

This all could be a fake, but still, it shows we have to get moving... <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />
 
Well, we always thought that they would make another one, but who knows where they are in the planning stages. Lets keep going with our script and make sure that's the one they use. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
In the worst case, our script could be PotC 5. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/razz.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":razz" border="0" alt="razz.gif" />
I haven't seen "The Dark Knight" and don't plan to either (too dark for my liking).
Anyway, I agree with Old Salt. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/icon_mrgreen1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":cheeky" border="0" alt="icon_mrgreen1.gif" />
I especially like that idea of each of the three main characters (Jack, Edwards and Mercer) trying to feel each other out.
Could be interesting. Especially if Jack is the only one to find out the whole thing is about Tia anyway.

<!--quoteo--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE </div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Jack's rather naive view of the world and those around him take a beating during this particular voyage and propel him toward the man and pirate he will turn out to be.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->EXACTLY!!! <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/danse1.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":dance" border="0" alt="danse1.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=272690:date=Aug 11 2008, 10:55 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 11 2008, 10:55 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272690"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->In the worst case, our script could be PotC 5. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/razz.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":razz" border="0" alt="razz.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Well, since we are working on a prequel hopefully it will stand out a bit. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/cool.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid="8)" border="0" alt="cool.gif" /> And there is no Will Turner in our script. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/razz.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":razz" border="0" alt="razz.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=272690:date=Aug 11 2008, 10:55 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 11 2008, 10:55 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272690"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I haven't seen "The Dark Knight" and don't plan to either (too dark for my liking).<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
It's not that dark, Pieter. It was a very well made movie, I plan to see it again soon enough. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=272690:date=Aug 11 2008, 10:55 AM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 11 2008, 10:55 AM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=272690"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I especially like that idea of each of the three main characters (Jack, Edwards and Mercer) trying to feel each other out.
Could be interesting. Especially if Jack is the only one to find out the whole thing is about Tia anyway.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
It would spice up the script and add an underlying tension to the early scenes. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" /> And all that tension would build up to a crescendo when Jack finally takes the ship and screams at the other two that Tia has always been Beckett's real target. It can affect each differently, with Edwards feeling betrayed at Beckett's duplicity and ultimately becoming the root cause of him following Jack into piracy later on. And we can have some fun with how it affects Mercer. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
Okay, so how does this revamped storyline look?

1 - Becket gives orders to Mercer.

2 - Beckett gives orders to Edwards.

3 - Jack arrives at port and Beckett gives him his orders.

(This could be part of the three way plot revolving around Jack, Edwards and Mercer as each is only told a portion of the plan that Beckett utlimately wants to carry out.)

<i>4 - Jack makes some off the cuff remarks to another character either on the dock or on the ship about how easily he can take advantage of Beckett.</i>

5 - Jack, Edwards and Mercer sail to the Ivory Coast. Dinner scene on board the Wench.

6 - Wicked Wench sails down the coast of Africa, spots turtle rock. "Land ho" scene.

7 - They come ashore. GW moment and upside down map scene.

8 - Jack, Mercer, Edwards and marines come through the forest, lion roar in the distance scene.

9 - Jack meets Tia, leaves with Edwards to go to take the Wench into the French port to attack. We can have some encounter again with the lion, or just hear him again but this time its just Edwards and Jack. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/dunno.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":shrug" border="0" alt="dunno.gif" /> Also, Edwards tells Jack what he knows of the mission on the way to the port.

10 - Mercer succeeds in "drafting" most of the men in the village to attack the French port. After they march off he has the marines round up the rest of the village and Tia. Flower in the dirt scene.

11 - With the battle for the port over, Mercer leads the villagers into the Wench in chains. Jack is horrified.

12 - The attack on the French port is successful, though it angers a French pirate who follows the Wench out to sea.

13 - Wicked Wench has a battle with the French pirate after leaving Africa. Jack defeats them and gives Edwards command (with a compliment of EITC marines) of the French ship.

14 - Jack winds up freeing the French pirate and his crew and overtaking Mercer and the EITC marines left on the Wench.

15 - Edwards comes in on Jack making his flag and they wind up parting ways. Jack tells Edwards and Mercer that Tia was the real target of Beckett's plan.

13 - Jack frees Tia and natives, she gives him the compass.

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We have some other earlier plot outlines on page 69. This is a rough draft of course as to the coarse of events as we have them at this moment. They remain fluid, as always.
 
That sounds pretty good to me. I don't think we need to have the Mercer briefing scene onscreen though.
Obviously it takes place, but we don't need to see it.

Question: How does Jack find out it's Tia Beckett wants?
And why would he tell the other two?

Another question: Did Jack know the French pirate prior to the attack?
Perhaps Jack did some off-the-record deals with him in the past?
 
<!--quoteo(post=273654:date=Aug 16 2008, 12:39 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 16 2008, 12:39 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=273654"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->That sounds pretty good to me. I don't think we need to have the Mercer briefing scene onscreen though.
Obviously it takes place, but we don't need to see it.<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
We don't? Are you sure? Do we want to keep what Mercer was told a secret or share it with the audience? Especially if were using the bit that they were all told a bit of the mission?

<!--quoteo(post=273654:date=Aug 16 2008, 12:39 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 16 2008, 12:39 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=273654"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Question: How does Jack find out it's Tia Beckett wants?
And why would he tell the other two?<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
He deduces it. Maybe because of something Tia tells him. I think he would tell the other two because he feels deep down that its wrong and maybe he's trying to screw Beckett in the process. Also, it is a motivating factor for Edwards later on to turn pirate himself.

<!--quoteo(post=273654:date=Aug 16 2008, 12:39 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 16 2008, 12:39 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=273654"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->Another question: Did Jack know the French pirate prior to the attack?
Perhaps Jack did some off-the-record deals with him in the past?<!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
That's interesting. I hadn't thought about Jack having some prior history with the French pirate. Rather just having the pirate come after him after the port is attacked. Though we could we work in some prior history between them. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
I think three briefing scenes is a bit much.
Anyway, the audience will assume that Mercer knows everything.
Then when Jack figured out about Beckett wanting Tia,
Mercer's surprise will actually be a surprise. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="wink.gif" />

We need to figure out a plausible way for Jack to deduce it.
And also a believable situation for him to say it.
But we can work on that later. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />

The prior history is just a random though.
Might open some more story possibilities. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/dunno.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":shrug" border="0" alt="dunno.gif" />
 
<!--quoteo(post=274179:date=Aug 19 2008, 12:31 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 19 2008, 12:31 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=274179"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->I think three briefing scenes is a bit much.
Anyway, the audience will assume that Mercer knows everything.
Then when Jack figured out about Beckett wanting Tia,
Mercer's surprise will actually be a surprise. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/wink.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=";)" border="0" alt="wink.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
So leave the audience in the dark about what Mercer knows? I guess that could work. Three briefing scenes does sound repetitious but I wanted Jack's declaration to be a complete surprise to both Mercer and Edwards and for the audience to know that, since it could have an impact on both men, though the impact it has on Mercer is debatable since he remains with Beckett while Edwards eventually bolts.

<!--quoteo(post=274179:date=Aug 19 2008, 12:31 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 19 2008, 12:31 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=274179"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->We need to figure out a plausible way for Jack to deduce it.
And also a believable situation for him to say it.
But we can work on that later. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Maybe the French pirate can tell him something that would lead him to deduce it. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/dunno.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":shrug" border="0" alt="dunno.gif" /> We can always figure it out as you stated though. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />

<!--quoteo(post=274179:date=Aug 19 2008, 12:31 PM:name=Pieter Boelen)--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE (Pieter Boelen @ Aug 19 2008, 12:31 PM) <a href="index.php?act=findpost&pid=274179"><{POST_SNAPBACK}></a></div><div class='quotemain'><!--quotec-->The prior history is just a random though.
Might open some more story possibilities. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/dunno.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":shrug" border="0" alt="dunno.gif" /><!--QuoteEnd--></div><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Agreed. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/yes.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":yes" border="0" alt="yes.gif" />
 
We can show Mercer being surprised when Jack tells him.
That way the audience will know that he never knew either.
Possibly Jack himself also assumes that Mercer does know,
so he is also surprised that Beckett never confided that in Mercer.
 
The surprised look on Mercer's face would be a very good shot. We may need though to have the ramifications of that look addressed later in the script.



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JACK
I think he wouldn't stay around
too long with the first option
against him.


A ROAR IS HEARD NEARBY. MERCER AND EVERYONE PULLS THEIR
WEAPONS AND PREPARES TO FIGHT. MERCER LOOKS INTO THE WOODS
THEN TOWARDS JACK, LOOKS SLIGHTLY AWAY THEN LOOKS AT JACK
AGAIN WHO IS MISSING. HE APPEARS AT THE END OF THE LINE
HIDING BEHIND A MARINE.


JACK
Sorry there chap, I was just
protecting our rear.


MERCER ROLLS HIS EYES. THE GROUP MAKES IT TO THE VILLAGE.
MERCER STOPS AND ALLOWS THE GROUP TO GO FORWARD, HE GLANCES
BEHIND AND YOU SEE SEVERAL PIECES OF FOLIAGE SHAKE. HE LOOKS
FORWARD AND CONTINUES.

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I love this scene from Mercer's draft of the jungle scene. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/24.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":rofl" border="0" alt="24.gif" />
 
Sounds good. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/me.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":onya" border="0" alt="me.gif" />
 
Sorry everyone that I have not been active, I have a virus on my laptop and I am probably going to lose everything. I have to re-install the operating system...or wipe it.. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/sad.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":(" border="0" alt="sad.gif" /> <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/sad.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":(" border="0" alt="sad.gif" /> <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/sad.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":(" border="0" alt="sad.gif" /> I am at a friends, but I cant reply too much. I will get the computer wiped ASAP. Sorry again...
 
AGH! At least we have everything still in this thread. Right...? <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/mybad.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":facepalm" border="0" alt="mybad.gif" />
 
Sorry to hear that, Mercer. I was battling a virus as well last week. Do you have any protection? Maybe you can download a spyware or anti-virus program so you don't have to reformat.

@Pieter We have the script in this thread so we can always have it downloaded back into a screenwriting program, right?
 
In the worst case, we can just stick it in Word. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/razz.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":razz" border="0" alt="razz.gif" />
 
Well, its for this very reason I have a program that backs up the file on a secure online database every time i save it to the system, its safe. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />

But, I have bad news, the virus had infected my computer so bad, that Norton couldnt stop it, and I had to wipe everything and re-install the OS and drivers. I contacted Dell and spoke for 3+ hours, and this is what I came up with. <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/sad.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":(" border="0" alt="sad.gif" /> I hope to resume asap. I have to install the remaining drivers. It shouldnt take that long... <img src="style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":)" border="0" alt="smile.gif" />
 
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